Hey can i please have your opinion on this poem if you dont mind me asking?

From Daughter .To Mom





I feel that if I run away you would care more


or if i die you would feel more


that if i change you will love me more but yet my changes


never make you standards


Im always wrong


Im always bad someones always better


You never cried you never laugh but yet you feel better


He makes you cry and say bad things about me and you go along with him .why choose him over me im your daughter


im your blood you should love me for who i am.


Instead of talk behind my back and think im


just that far away to not hear those taunting words


for they break my trust and now i don't even care


about you about him about anything ive lost my faith


and everything because that darkness that brainwash


he did to you can never be repaired


and our relationship with never go any farther my dear


im done with you forever im lost in the shadows finding my way out with out you by my side


just hanging on to whoever i ve came in contact


and i know they Harley care


SO now ill just wait and move on this ugly face


to start over and show You and later read this to you to hurt you


and tell you how you were never thereHey can i please have your opinion on this poem if you dont mind me asking?
Very touching poem. I love it. I really like how you express your feelings and thoughts into this poem. It's like while you were writing this poem, your hurt and feelings also went into this poem along with your ideas and meaning. This is a very good poem that I would like to remember it forever.Hey can i please have your opinion on this poem if you dont mind me asking?
As far as poetry goes it's beyond the cliche teenage angst. It's almost painful to read it's so cliche.





Honest opinion, sorry.





As for the content, you need to meditate or find some constructive way of dealing with your issues. As it stands now all your problems own you... you need to take ownership of your problems. You'll understand some day.
I hope that one day you can tell you mother face to face how she makes you feel. You only have 1 monther. How would you feel if she was gone one never to return again.
no complete sentences


very little punctuation


poor structure


some words that are in there shouldn't be


spell check


grammar check


just typical teenage angst
awh; if you feel that way; way to gooo! speaking out your problems to her and venting is soo much better than suicide, which is never the solution to anything.
its really touching but its hard to read . the format of it is just a bit strange to me. great job !
sounds more like an emo song, write some music for it :D
Honestly it sucks.. If you are the daughter just tell it all to your mum.If you are the mum why are you here in stand being with your daugter...
Looks good but im not a poet
great! maybe shell put it on the fidge!
too long to read, but it's probably terrible if you wrote it